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Friday, April 17, 2020

writing on a friday


4 comments:

  1. Hi Eddie
    You are a very imaginative writer, really liked reading your story.
    I see you have used your story plan to write the story. Is there a way you can copy your story and write it in a new document so it all flows together?
    Maybe you could tell us how the water from the sprinklers helped them escape.
    Thanks for sharing your work

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  2. Hello Eddie.
    When I read your story,I had your voice in my head,and the way you have written this,sounds exactly like you'd say it.
    Great work.I like reading things that are different and made up.
    I am guessing,the Ruby you have used is your sister and does Anime appear later in the story?.

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  3. Hi Eddie,

    I enjoyed reading your narrative and I noticed that you followed your feedback and simplified your problem by taking out problem 1. I look forward to you finishing off your resolution on Monday!
    Keep up the awesome learning!

    Miss D

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  4. Hello Eddie.
    I hope you had a great weekend.I can't wait to see more of your work.Take care and have a super week.

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