I am a Year 7 student in the Uru MÄnuka Cluster. This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete, it will be my first drafts. Remember to be positive, thoughtful and helpful when you leave me a comment.
Wow! Eddie it looks like you're setting the scene for a narrative story with lots of description and detail. As you start to turn this plan into a story you can develop your character by showing how he feels for each of the different problems that arises. The ideas in your plan allow you to describe the sounds, fights, people, the food, the pace and the objects that people might be wearing, holding or using. I'm sure it will be a very colourful narrative.
Hi Eddie,I am impressed with the amount of work you are doing. It will be interesting to see your narrative progress. I would not like to be at that party but it is good to see there is a positive resolution. Are you going to be using speech marks when people are talking?
Wow! Eddie it looks like you're setting the scene for a narrative story with lots of description and detail. As you start to turn this plan into a story you can develop your character by showing how he feels for each of the different problems that arises. The ideas in your plan allow you to describe the sounds, fights, people, the food, the pace and the objects that people might be wearing, holding or using. I'm sure it will be a very colourful narrative.
ReplyDeleteHi Eddie,I am impressed with the amount of work you are doing. It will be interesting to see your narrative progress. I would not like to be at that party but it is good to see there is a positive resolution. Are you going to be using speech marks when people are talking?
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