I am a Year 7 student in the Uru MÄnuka Cluster. This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete, it will be my first drafts. Remember to be positive, thoughtful and helpful when you leave me a comment.
Great writing Eddie and not boring at all. I like how the boy was quick thinking in using the marshmallows to distract the creature, but what a shame the boy didn't get to eat any! The creature ate the lot and STILL wanted to be mean! At least it sounds like the boy was safe in the end.
Great writing Eddie and not boring at all. I like how the boy was quick thinking in using the marshmallows to distract the creature, but what a shame the boy didn't get to eat any! The creature ate the lot and STILL wanted to be mean! At least it sounds like the boy was safe in the end.
ReplyDeleteGood job for completing writing. Next time see if you can include more adjectives and vivid verbs.
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